ONLINE FICTION: Twenty Thousand Gold Stars (Master/Other)

White Rose has lived a double life for too long. For too many years, he has struggled alone to determine how he should handle an ethical dilemma he never wanted to face. Now, finally, he has found help online. But is it the right help?

Parental supervision is strongly suggested for this story.

It was a foundation of his life that he must tell no one. The first signs that this foundation would be shattered came on a windy day at the end of February, as he sat in a room lit only by the bright colors glowing from his computer screen.

(Warning: The replies below include spoilers for the story.)

Comments

I really really loved this story. it kept me on the edge of my seat right till the end. Really happy that Johnnie did the right thing. =) The ending was really sweet. very lovely story.
Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. Sorry I didn't see your post before.

(Anonymous)

this story was simply fascinating. the different perspectives presented all seemed so easily rationalized, though in the end i remain convinced that white rose and gold star were doing the right thing. i'd also like to say that i found pedo-hag particularly intriguing and complex--the part where she re-wrote her journal was, for me, one of the most powerful moments in the entire novel. thank you for writing this.

after i finished, i went and searched the actual message boards. i was able to find one called Christian Boylove Forum or something that used the acronym CBLF instead of CBF, so i was fairly sure that one was accurate. i was disappointed to find that i couldn't find anything that seemed like Crossroads...
"used the acronym CBLF instead of CBF"

Yes, when they moved to a new domain a few years back, the CBF domains were already taken, so they chose a CBLF domain instead.

"i was disappointed to find that i couldn't find anything that seemed like Crossroads..."

Crossroads just shut down in the past year, after going for eight years. My portrayal of Crossroads in the novel was actually a crossover between that real-life forum and its real-life predecessor, Close Encounters. Both forums were run by the same organization and had the same mission, but Close Encounters was where the politer conversations took place. :)

Thank you so much for your kind comments about the novel. I'm glad you enjoyed reading it.

(Anonymous)

I suppose it's very late to be commenting on this novel, but I've been assured that feedback is always welcomed.

I loved this story. The presentation of the various viewpoints was sympathetic and challenging, and I was so captivated by the interweaving plotlines as we slowly learned more about the characters through posts that I made it through the whole thing in one sitting.
A beautifully written and haunting tale.

Thank you
"I've been assured that feedback is always welcomed."

I live for feedback. :) Thank you for taking the time to provide it. I'm glad that the interweaving plotlines worked because this was a story I wrote during a period when (due to a sudden disaster with my eyes) I couldn't read print at all, not even so much as a plot outline. Since I didn't yet have text-to-speech software in my computer, I had to juggle the various strands of the novel in my head while I was typing up the novel.

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